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[a37]break this up
[a38]I'm pretty sure Marine should be capitalized. Don't think I caught all instances
[a39]you already used this in the sentence
[a40]nice detail!
[a41]this may be a british term? in the US we always use "blood type"
[a42]i'm not sure how to address the use of british terms when in the POV of someone who is an american character. up to you